Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

By The Way...


Author: Toxic Rose
Elite Ratio:    5.82 - 159 /220 /97
Words: 89
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1021
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 556



Description:


I love love.


By The Way...



By the way, I think you're wonderful,
And your smile outshines the moon;
Your laughter reminds me of a waterfall-
It can pull me out of my gloom.

Did you know I think you're great?
I think of you all the time-
I'd give anything to be with you
'Cause you make my broken love rhyme.

By the way, I think you're great
But I've already said that once before;
I know you know what I'm trying to say-
I love you, nothing less or more.




Submitted on 2006-05-13 19:46:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  So cute to see young people writing like this... Very cute indeed... I like this little piece and the repetition it had in the beggining of every stanza... trying to bang in the person's head how you feel for them... which sometimes works... not always though... the words always switch up on you and the person thinks you are just faking to be with them... it is a very nice write though and I dig it... just not as much as I dig other writings on here... very cute and heartfelt write though and hope you just keep writing...

Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
| Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
  A grand write. Very effective use of repetition and rhyme.

Quite profound. If you haven't already, give it to Cory... :)

Anyways, an keep up the good work!

Joe
| Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by SilverLightning | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



103122