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    dots Submission Name: The Great Beyonddots
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    Author: xaos
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 34/54/49
    Words: 725
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 119
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 4125



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    dotsThe Great Beyonddots
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    I Had Trouble Deciding On How I Was Going To Write The Topic, So I Decided To Take It To The Streets To Ask Around To See What The People Thought About The Great Beyond..

    People I Meet:
    Frank, Age 60, Retired
    Jake, Age 21, Unemployed
    Cathy, Age 34, School Teacher
    Father Mahoney, Age 50, Priest

    First I Met Frank, And When I Asked Him About The Great Beyond This Is What He Had To Say..

    When I Was Young, My Imagination Would Wander When I Gazed At The Stars..
    I Imagined I Was An Astronaut, On My Way To A Stop Over At Mars..
    Finally Seeing That Which I Worshipped From Afar, Leading A New Life’s Decision..
    To Start A New Home On Either Jupiter Or Saturn Was My Ultimate Vision..
    To Finally Break Free Of The Sky’s Division, Between Us And The Heaven’s..
    And Enter The Solar System Leaving Me Higher Then Any Fallen Brethrens..
    So, That’s What The Great Beyond Has Always Meant To Me..
    But I Hope It’s Not To Long Until This Becomes A Reality..

    I Thanked The Man, Then I Met Jake Who Was Freestyling On The Corner..

    Yo, When I Think Of The Great Beyond, I Think Of Finally Getting Signed..
    Meeting A Record Company, And Being Told To Sign On The Dotted Line..
    To Finally Put Away All My Struggles, And Become An Ultimate Superstar..
    Better Yet An Icon, A God To Which Kid’s Learn To Worship From Afar..
    Sounds A Little Bizzare, But This Is What I Dreamt About Since I Was A Kid..
    Listening To The Classics From Eric B And Rakim, Then Rhyming Off My Lid..
    It Be The Best Thing I Ever Did, To Just Walk Home With A Nice Record Deal..
    And Tell My Parents, “We Can Finally Leave This Shit Hole And Just Peel..”

    Word, The Kid Deserved It, But I Had To Move On, And Then I Met Cathy..

    I Wish.. In The Great Beyond There Will Actually Be Some Peace..
    That In This Lifetime, I Will Finally See All The Gun Fire Cease..
    Because..
    With All This Blood Shed, It Seems We Would Rather Leave A Man Impaled..
    Then Trying To Find A Reason Why This Conflict Actually Availed..
    My Thoughts Are Drastic, Because I Cut Through All The Bullshit And Lies..
    I Learn To Look Through Children Eyes, And I Finally See Their Silent Cries..
    With Satan In Disguise, We Teach The Children That It’s Alright To Fight..
    Aren’t I Right Mr Bush? Is This What Your Trying To Teach Children Is Right..
    I Hope You Felt Really Excited, Finally Discovering Saddam In The Hidden Burrow..
    But The Only Difference Between You And Him, Is He Comes From The 3rd World..

    What Strong Words, I Thanked Her, And Thought I Was Done Until I Met Father Mahoney..

    Now My Son, You Ask Me About The Great Beyond, As If It’s Not Known..
    God Bestows His Gift’s On You And You Still Act As If He Is Unknown..
    Love And Kindness Is All That He Has Shown, Didn’t You Read His Book..
    If Not Maybe You Should Give It A Look, It Might Even Leave You Shook..
    To Learn That All Good Catholics, Rise To The Almighty Place In The Sky..
    It Also Teaches You How To Deny The Temptations Of Satan When You Die..
    So Give The Book A Try, Then Come Back To Me And Ask This Again..
    And You Will Learn That The Great Beyond Is Actually Heaven..

    Thank You Father, Now With All These Opinions Here’s My Idea on The Great Beyond..

    Will I Be To Adapt To A Working Man’s World, Where The Hours Are 9 To 5..
    I Wonder If I Will Strive, Or If I Will I Just Struggle To Survive..
    That’s Only 3 Years From Now, I Can’t Even Imagine About Ten..
    I Mean Will I Own A House, Or Even Have A Family By Then..
    Will I Still Lift This Pen, Or Will Poetry Be A Thing Of The Past..
    Or Will It Be A Shift In My Career That Will Be Able To Last..
    Am I Moving To Fast, or Should I Slow To Wait And See..
    Confused By The Past, What’s The Great Beyond Hold For Me?..




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    ||| Comments |||
      It shows the views well... But i'm not sure it deserves a vote of a 5. I expected a bit more out of it. I don't know what..it's just not worthy of a 5. What I really liked was how you were able to take the way they might talk and incorperate the languages of different people into it. that was very good.
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]



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