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Author: Nessus
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i dont know what this is


untitled



you cut me open
with a knife you dont know your holding
i want to fight back
but dont for fears that you assisted in molding

i can hardly feel
the strength of my conviction
because in sitting dormate
i am in constant contradiction

my heart has died
crushed by people i love
by vicious xcorns
that they do not know they are making

i am sick of hiding
sick of waiting for you to change
i am done
i will not wait any longer
here i am
here i stand
and i am not moving for anyone




Submitted on 2006-05-14 15:21:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yeah what is xcorn? but other then that i liked it and i also liked your pic as well i really like this quatrain
i can hardly feel
the strength of my conviction
because in sitting dormate
i am in constant contradiction
i love it keep up the good work
darcey
| Posted on 2006-05-14 00:00:00 | by Darcey D | [ Reply to This ]
  What is an xcorn?

This is a good poem and I like your pic! Keep on writing!
| Posted on 2006-05-14 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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