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    dots Submission Name: Revolvedots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angst
    Total Views: 1184
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    Bytes: 1297



    Description:
       Re-experiencing some abuses that haven't occurred in about 3 years. Forgive me if I sound too emo, but everything written here is true and I'm sick of being attacked like this.


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    Memory, haunting silent words.
    Repeated sufferings, from lips like swords.
    The familiar quake of confusion.
    The lies that break the wall of illuson.

    Is this what it is like to re-live.
    Is this what it is like to re-love.
    Is this what it is like to revolve this unsolved
    Memory. Mystery. I am refeeling history.

    Cold eyes, searching with dagger sight.
    Making miserable my already deepened plight.
    Forgotten ghosts turned into enemies.
    What have I done now to deserve pain I cannot see.

    Is this what it is like to re-live
    Is this what it is like to re-love
    Is this what it is like to revolve this unsolved
    Memory. Mystery. I am refeeling history.

    Back then no one ever said
    This wouldn't ever happen again.
    Still here I shake, still willing to take
    The blows from those who never knew me
    But still hate me. Who go inside my heart and
    haunt, make me feel what I don't want

    To re-live. To re-love.
    To revolve this unsolved memory
    to re-live. To re-love.
    Is this what it is like to revolve this unsolved
    Memory. Mystery. I am refeeling history.




    Submitted on 2006-05-14 16:54:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a really good piece. The refrain is amazing. I don't actually have any idea what you're talking about, but I feel for you all the same. I think this is going to be a favorite as well. And there's nothing wrong with going back to something 3 years later. It took me a year and a half of reliving lots of crap to finally be able to forgive Mike. Oh, btw, Mike and I are cool, and I hold nothing against him!!! Just thought I'd let you know, lol. See ya in the morning! Luvs,
    Hannah
    | Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the dizzy kind of feel it gives you (relive, relove, revolve, or maybe it's how sleepy I am.)
    I appreciate how much it seems to mean to you. Poetry should be like that.

    The repitition gives it a little something extra.
    Good Job
    The Conqueror
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      I am so sorry to hear about your past abuse, that is so sad! This is a good poem though, it gets your feelings out in a constructive manner, good job!

    Keep your head up, the sun is still shining and things will get better for you!
    | Posted on 2006-05-14 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello Jester_Gester I must say very very very well written. To drive a point home its good to use repetition in the number 3 as you did. Is this what it is like to re-live
    Is this what it is like to re-love
    Is this what it is like to revolve this unsolved
    Memory. Mystery. I am refeeling history.

    Very Powerful. Kinda reminds me of the ol guy on the porch hehe. He sits and sighs and remanices about that one time. Holding on to the pass is one thing,if done on a positive note. I thought I had this one pegged. The line that threw me was (Forgotten ghost turned into enemies) that line throws out many deminsions. Such as somone who may have died. how ever most of your poem hints at an intimate relation ship. To me that would be one on one. However in that line it suggest that you have more then one ghost that haunts yours past and or present. I must say I held on to every word you wrote. I hate to think anyone as kind as you suffering from abuse. Especially if its from more then one. None the less I can see you are troubled deeply. I wish I could help. From reading some of your other poems I would have to say that you left out certain information on purpose. At first guess I thought it was an x-boyfriend and then rekindled. However his lips of swords,make it sound like he had plotted to hurt you deeply. Upon the kiss you feel that old feeling back again and fall deeply in love while being weak in the knees. Sounds like you gave him all your trust again. Then his lies turned your love and trust into an illusion. The only thing I can think about the line of Forgotten Ghost, would be your emotions have been stired up again. After all they come from inside That being the case then perhapes they are ghost like cannot be seen but most certainlly felt. Well I tried I think I got most of it.
    I must say you most certainly are a talanted Person.


    Sincerly Gannondalf aka Big Bear
    | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by Gannondalf | [ Reply to This ]


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