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    dots Submission Name: Undoing the Donedots
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    Author: fiery whisper
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangladesh
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 51/49/33
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 100
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 497



    Description:
       it runs.


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    dotsUndoing the Donedots
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    acting on life's play
    never knowing what to say
    randomly flitting through pages
    finding peace among the sages
    traversing roads untaken
    bidden by those mistaken
    driven by the one who can't drive
    living where life can't thrive
    being the car without wheels
    forever falling of the hills
    dipping in the blues
    searching for the hues
    this is life is just me
    its the insanity that cannot be




    Submitted on 2006-05-15 01:58:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      YOu asked for thoughts (I apologize if this means I critique you and it was not wanted) The description confused me a little: what is meant by "it runs" define it...I'm befuddled. Capitalization and punctuation would help it to "run" more smoothly.
    And I also found a typo. In line 10: falling off rather than of-at least I think it to be a typo. Continue searching for those hues, in writing it takes time, but they will surface more brightly than you ever though possible!
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]



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