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    dots Submission Name: World of wonderdots
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    Author: fiery whisper
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangladesh
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 51/49/33
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 209
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    dotsWorld of wonderdots
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    The first ray of light peeked through the shadows
    Lighting the blues, the yellows and the greens,
    The great cottony hues laughed away with the wind
    And I heard a silent whisper (was that mine?),
    'Who am I in this world of wonder?'

    Then came the rain with thunder and lightning
    And yet, had the gentlest touch upon my soul,
    Brought forth a rainbow bubbling with joy
    In awe, I watched the birds chirp away merrily into the sky
    It was almost an afterthought when I heard (or did I?)
    'What am I in this world of wonder?'

    At last came the waves, crashing like white fleets of flame,
    The mountains roared and the smoke bellowed,
    The land parted as the world shook
    Devouring that which always stood.
    And amidst the chaos, the scream and the pain
    I heard myself wonder,
    'Where am I in this world of wonder?'




    Submitted on 2006-05-15 02:01:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't think I've seen imagery used that well in a poem on eliteskills - until now. I enjoyed this poem, especially the last stanza.

    I interpret it as feeling insignificant compared to the nature and wonders of this earth. I feel the very same ...

    You emphasised your thoughts well by repeating the words: "... am I in this world of wonder?".

    Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by Leila | [ Reply to This ]
      "I heard myself wonder,
    'Where am I in this world of wonder?'"

    Ok that's the only problem I had with this poem. You should probably use some other word for the first "wonder." Too many "wonder"s in too short a period of time. only my opinion though.

    Anyway I thought this was really well-written. Like Leila said, the imagery is amazing.

    good job.
    | Posted on 2006-06-02 00:00:00 | by gargleafg | [ Reply to This ]



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