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    dots Submission Name: Little China Dollsdots
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    Author: DiamondTears
    ASL Info:    16/F/Wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 61/97/48
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
    Total Views: 166
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 688



    Description:
       Mmm. Tired Poem. Dont Ask.


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    dotsLittle China Dollsdots
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    This little red china doll,
    Sits and stares at me all day,
    This little blue china doll,
    I put in the closet at bay,
    This little red china doll,
    Has such sad eyes,
    The little blue china doll,
    Sometimes bites,
    And the little yellow china doll,
    Sits and screams out her left lung,
    Then stares quietly looking kind of glum.
    As for the little lilac china doll,
    Who has a creepy laugh,
    She murdered the yellow one,
    The red one told me that.
    So the lilac, blue and red,
    Spin their porclin head,
    And they are starting to creep me out,
    No wonder my whole family is dead.




    Submitted on 2006-05-15 03:02:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I was not expecting that ending, lol. Very twisty, I liked that a lot.
    Until the ending, this was my though process while reading. i thought at first it was from the point of view of a young girl, but that it kind of got somewhat demented, so then I thought that it was from the point of view of someone in an insane asylum. then you throw that ending in there, and it somehow fit and didn't at the same time. It threw me off, but i loved it so much...it's really confusing to describe how I feel about that ending.
    Overall, this was a really nice write, and I'm going to say to keep it up!


    Peace....for now or never
    *Toxic*
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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