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    dots Submission Name: It's gonedots

    Author: soaring eyes
    ASL Info:    17/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/30/19
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsIt's gonedots

    I'm loosing a love or maybe just a friend.
    but the memories, with a song of our love will never end.
    You told me you loved me and that you would never make me cry
    Now I know that S**t you were saying was just a lie.
    Time we shared together is now through.
    I miss you so much i don't know what to do.
    It's gone
    The love we once had
    It's gone
    The thought of it alone makes me so sad
    It's gone
    The passion and caress I will miss
    It's gone
    The feel that I had when we shared a kiss.
    May be one day we can speak again
    but for now a new life is what i have to begin
    It's gone.

    Submitted on 2006-05-15 08:53:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey this was a good poem. First loves and first break up and pain....is very hard. We just got to all get over that bump and prepare ourselves for the next one. Hang in there. Good poem. Take care.

    ~Christina aka POETRY
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      I really feel this one. Maybe because I just went through a bad break up...or mabybe because ur a talented writer. I think though, its both. You could even turn this into a song if u really wanted to. It's a good piece. Congrats and keep it up. peace-

    Ps. I hope u don't mind if I favorite it. If u do...contact me and I can take it down.
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      A lost love or a break up is always a difficult thing to cope with. Your words expressed this very well. It was full of emotion and written with love - well done.

    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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