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    dots Submission Name: Solemnitydots
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    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Sometimes we write when we're happy. Sometimes we write when we're sad. All the while, we believe we are the ones writing. Sometimes we're not so sure.


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    Deep in the fields,
    Of the carnivorous yields,
    Stands the scarecrow, so tall.

    The crows peck his eyes,
    All the while he cries,
    Stands the sad scarecrow, so tall.




    Submitted on 2006-05-15 17:13:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeilds => yields (i before e except after c)

    I think you can cut sad out of the last line. The tone added to the fact hes crying we already know hes sad. Otherwise this is good. I like the word and sound play of this.. also the images are strong in my mind. Gj :-)
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by Leala | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Wednesday. I think this would not be nearly as good if it was any longer. I can picture the scare crow vividly. Good job.
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    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and sweet. I really like the way you took a few short words and spun them together here. Very well thought out. I honestly feel really bad for the scarecrow.

    -Porter
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by Mr.Wednesday | [ Reply to This ]


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