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    dots Submission Name: Whydots
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    Author: Laz
    ASL Info:    22/m/WV
    Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 18/36/5
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsWhydots
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    Why is life so valuable to some and yet to others it means nothing

    Why is death meaningful to all and yet no thought of what it means

    why have life just to be consumed by death if all that happens is bring sarrow and pain.

    to see death is to see what's next, what awaits the future of all.

    How can death be so powerful and yet life so dulled by the pain of time.

    With time can the pain ease, some say it can but some scars last forever.

    What strength can one pull from the light when the dark of death threatens to take control.

    When will the dark consume the remander of light and erode the thought of living to live.

    Why do people strive for death but when faced with it reach for the light.

    Is it strength to smile into the dark as death slowly viel's the eyes.

    The strength is the key how can one man stop looking at death and embrace the light of life.




    Submitted on 2006-05-15 17:32:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i just happened to stop by, i noticed your screen name on the community page. i hope you dont mind a comment, seeing as this is your featured piece. im reading through these other remarks on what is figured to be an outstanding bit of poetry, and yet im trying to figure out how this piece could ever sound intelligent when read outloud. please, endulge me, and read your piece again, outloud, to yourself. if you know how to read, i would then assume you have some sort of understanding as to what i mean. the tense, correlation, procedure and structure are horribly disfigure, and completely unrelated throughout the piece, and this makes for a difficult poem. and any poem which is difficult to read, is often passed up by the reader, who fails to see the morality of the author's intent, for sake of his/her terrible writing prowess. anyways, i hope this didnt come off as completely rude, i just dont understand what you believe makes this a good bit of poetry. take care.

    -tony
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by wonderbread1000 | [ Reply to This ]
      Damien
    Outstanding!!!!
    This is really one of the best worded writes Ive read in a while
    You said this perfectly
    Bravo my Friend!!!!
    I for one as I believe I have told you welcome Death but I am defonately not rushing it
    I think of Death as the final journey to life where we can all finally find peace
    Thank You for sharing this Great Write
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Very thought-provoking. Reminds me of highschool in a way. (Long story) A little short, but definately to the point. I really like this poem. :)
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by saramaple | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this poem of yours. Your thoughts come out flowing.... Good job!
    People should value their life more and live for their life, not be afraid of death.
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by iamwhoiam | [ Reply to This ]
      these are some of the most intelligent thoughts ive heard in a long time. where have all the smart people been. the poem is so deep with meaning both for the audience and the author. This is a great piece.
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by luvneverreturnd | [ Reply to This ]
      When people ask me why, I say, 'Why ask why, when how is so much more entertaining?'
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by Hiruetske | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it, it makes me feel, like there are other people out there who are like me...
    of course.....
    there isnt, cos im individual, full of individuality, and belgium chocolate as well, god, this stuff is filling after not having choc for nearly a year! oops, broke my resolution (half a year)
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]
      Very original and made me ponder on a few thougths I myself have had.

    okay...just a heads up sorrow is spelled wrong, but I don't care all that much just thought I would mention it.


    ~bianca
    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by bmc | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good write, Damien. I hope things start looking better for you soon. You're on my mind a lot....Stay safe....

    ~Doh
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by rememberplaydoh | [ Reply to This ]


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