i just happened to stop by, i noticed your screen name on the community page. i hope you dont mind a comment, seeing as this is your featured piece. im reading through these other remarks on what is figured to be an outstanding bit of poetry, and yet im trying to figure out how this piece could ever sound intelligent when read outloud. please, endulge me, and read your piece again, outloud, to yourself. if you know how to read, i would then assume you have some sort of understanding as to what i mean. the tense, correlation, procedure and structure are horribly disfigure, and completely unrelated throughout the piece, and this makes for a difficult poem. and any poem which is difficult to read, is often passed up by the reader, who fails to see the morality of the author's intent, for sake of his/her terrible writing prowess. anyways, i hope this didnt come off as completely rude, i just dont understand what you believe makes this a good bit of poetry. take care.
Damien Outstanding!!!! This is really one of the best worded writes Ive read in a while You said this perfectly Bravo my Friend!!!! I for one as I believe I have told you welcome Death but I am defonately not rushing it I think of Death as the final journey to life where we can all finally find peace Thank You for sharing this Great Write God Bless Ron
these are some of the most intelligent thoughts ive heard in a long time. where have all the smart people been. the poem is so deep with meaning both for the audience and the author. This is a great piece.
i love it, it makes me feel, like there are other people out there who are like me... of course..... there isnt, cos im individual, full of individuality, and belgium chocolate as well, god, this stuff is filling after not having choc for nearly a year! oops, broke my resolution (half a year)