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    dots Submission Name: Key Holedots
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    Author: Mr.Wednesday
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 5/12/5
    Words: 344
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 1105
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1968



    Description:
       Love poem based roughly on the style of ancient roman elegy poetry. It also uses a mathematical pattern known as the fibonacci sequence.


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    dotsKey Holedots
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    Key Hole

    A
    Key;
    Key hole
    Unlock thee;
    Tell me what you see.
    Is my mistress alone tonight?
    Does she keep company with another love?
    I worry that my fear is right.
    Tell me; set me free.
    Unlock thee
    Key hole,
    With
    Key

    Cold,
    Far,
    Far Away;
    She keeps me.
    Will not set me free
    Locked away at worlds end
    Captive I await the return of unrequited love,
    But when shes here I live again.
    Until then Ill be,
    I remain
    Far Away,
    And
    Cold

    I
    Sit
    And wait
    For morning
    To awaken her.
    She will see Ive been here.
    Peering through the keyhole Im hoping for but a glimpse;
    Hoping a faint whisper will touch my ear,
    For a midnight stir.
    For morning
    I sit
    And
    Wait

    Mad
    Im
    Driven
    By silence
    By uncertainty
    Jealousy begins to take hold.
    Anger and rage fill my veins and intoxicate me.
    I see it all start to unfold.
    I know that surely
    This silence,
    Will drive
    Me
    Mad

    Still,
    Im
    Lying
    On the ground.
    I want her to know,
    Shes the one who caused my demise.
    Lifeless for a moment then I stand up and walk away.
    As the night fades into sunrise
    She will never know.
    True to me
    And still
    I
    Lie

    A
    Key,
    Keyhole
    Wishing I had
    The means to turn you;
    A way to see all you have known.
    Tell me the truth is less vile than imagination.
    Cant I see what you have been shown?
    To see what is true;
    To see through,
    Through the
    Key
    Hole




    Submitted on 2006-05-15 17:33:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Settle down Shakespeare. Love is not ready for your domination.
    The key hole is obviously dominant in you. My question is: Are you dominant in the key hole?

    In honest reply, Colten
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem. I love the significance that you give the key hole, it has the power to break your heart or warm it, but letting you know the truth about your lover. I think this was very well written and I loved reading it. WOnderful, lovely.

    Jazmine Mystique Swaim
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you both for the kind words. I am overwhelmed by this early, positive response. Thank you very much.

    -Porter
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by Mr.Wednesday | [ Reply to This ]
      toally sweet, the format you used for this poem was really kool...i think that the way you set it up is so original...
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by Say what? | [ Reply to This ]
      yesssssssssssss, this was brilliant. I loved pretty much every line, especially this little beauty,

    "Cold,
    Far,
    Far Away;
    She keeps me.
    Will not set me free
    Locked away at worlds end"


    By far one of the best poems I've read on this website, your style was completely unique. And I also loved the overall structure. Great poem.
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by shmurr | [ Reply to This ]
      Not sure I understand your critique. Firstly, your opening statement seems to be a little insulting. It does seem out of context which leads me to believe that you are masking some serious insecurrities. If you have some constructive criticism I am looking forward to reading it. However, if I have misunderstood you and your criticisms are in earnest please elaborate.

    -Porter
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by Mr.Wednesday | [ Reply to This ]


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