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Dropped Ends

Author: Chicool2
ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266 /260 /60
Words: 101
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Hmm.. something that came to mind?

Dropped Ends

Fading beneath the surface of the murky water
How did I end up here?
Each day
Each night, I dreamt of a rescuing hand
To escape this empty place
Then someone reached out
And caressed my fingers.
He held out his palm and spoke soft words
Into one's unsuspecting ear.
The world fell still as he
Alone and Forgotten
Saved me from drowning in my own sorrow
Only to learn of his lost soul
Waiting to be found by its other
Joint Piece
And as I breathed again
I knew that
This was meant to gain love

Submitted on 2006-05-15 19:13:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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