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    dots Submission Name: Dropped Endsdots
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    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1125
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    Bytes: 620



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       Hmm.. something that came to mind?


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    dotsDropped Endsdots
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    Fading beneath the surface of the murky water
    How did I end up here?
    Each day
    Each night, I dreamt of a rescuing hand
    To escape this empty place
    Then someone reached out
    And caressed my fingers.
    He held out his palm and spoke soft words
    Into one's unsuspecting ear.
    The world fell still as he
    Alone and Forgotten
    Saved me from drowning in my own sorrow
    Only to learn of his lost soul
    Waiting to be found by its other
    Joint Piece
    And as I breathed again
    I knew that
    This was meant to gain love




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