Dropped Ends

Author: Chicool2 ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266 /260 /60 Words: 101

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Dropped Ends

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Fading beneath the surface of the murky water How did I end up here? Each day Each night, I dreamt of a rescuing hand To escape this empty place Then someone reached out And caressed my fingers. He held out his palm and spoke soft words Into one's unsuspecting ear. The world fell still as he Alone and Forgotten Saved me from drowning in my own sorrow Only to learn of his lost soul Waiting to be found by its other Joint Piece And as I breathed again I knew that This was meant to gain love

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