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    dots Submission Name: Sexless Tears (original version)dots
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    Author: RumnMoxie
    ASL Info:    27/does it matter?/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 97/87/37
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 207
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is an old poem I had published in Voice back in 2001. For it, I had to change one line: "Lest they bring the dogs out" to "Or they might bring the dogs out".


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    dotsSexless Tears (original version)dots
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    Mutilated Sweetness pulls the cord.
    Smile as the death-edge of
    Masculine
    And
    Feminine
    Tetter in wake.

    He tosses his long hair
    His defiance.
    The black eyeliner reflects the disgust
    What he ignores in the eyes of the sheep.
    He's aware of "Girlie" shadow.
    The voice in the back of his head
    Telling him that those people starting

    Might see a girl
    And not a

    Boy, don't get caught dressed like that.
    Lest they bring the dogs out.
    The say, kiss the girls, not the

    Boy's tear is wiped away
    A lover tears the shadows loose.
    He leans his lips to him.
    "Do not waste your sexless tears
    On their hate.
    They have no right to tell the world
    What is a girl, or what is a boy."




    Submitted on 2006-05-15 21:44:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very bold statement. and a subject very rarely addressed -- especially in poetry. I love it!! It was well written and expresses the confusion and pain well -- I don't like how the stanzas cut off, but they're picked back up in the next stanza and it seems to be an intentional thing, just something that personally gets at me... lol. Overall I love the poem and it's being added to my favorites.

    -x- Candie
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by teenage_dirtbag | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite bold! I enjoyed the way you detailed how this boy is caught up in a world of hate due to the fact he chooses to be a female instead of male. You showed the reader how the person going through this stuff may feel. I liked the ending. It was very good. I am glad you have had it published before. Great work.

    Trina
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written, and like your point. I only get worried that that point is often taken further than it needs to, leading to opposition that would otherwise support. People that ask for too much get nothing. equality swings back and forth like a pendulum, but never rests in the middle. I think your poem is powerful in its treating of a taboo subject. I have mixed feelings about the last line of defining girls and boys. I guess I would need to know what you meant by that to be able to comment.
    -Vas
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by hey.you | [ Reply to This ]
      i like your style of writing, almost like a play on stage or a small insert from a movie script, it is a though provoking piece and eloquently written...thanks for sharing ;)
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]


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