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    dots Submission Name: times updots

    Author: bambi144
    ASL Info:    17/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 132/109/31
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       i quite like this one funnily enough! it started out as bit of a jokey poem for a friend, then i really got into writing it!

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    I know when it's time,
    I can smell it in his heart,
    Beating so slowly,
    Begging me to tear it apart.

    It may start out innocent,
    He may start out polite,
    But nature beckons me forward,
    To end his life tonight.

    His blood smells so sweet,
    His skin so tender,
    Sometimes I just can't help myself,
    And I won't let him surrender.

    It starts out easy,
    A nip here, a scratch there,
    But that won't satisfy my hunger,
    Although he remains unaware.

    It begins to get rough,
    He starts to fight,
    And he finally realizes,
    Why I brought him here tonight.

    His skins rips easily,
    Leaving it at a bloody flat,
    Human flesh so soft,
    And it's so cute how he screams like that.

    The feeling of his skin,
    Beneath my nails,
    Is something that I cannot describe,
    A feeling that can't be put into details.

    His life may end,
    He may cry his last cry,
    He may utter his last goodbye,
    But he will never be able to ask why...

    Submitted on 2006-05-16 05:02:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Candie, it made me think of harsh sex. It also made me think about a book I read, Blood and Chocolate. It's about a werewolf who falls in love with a human. She changes while they're having sex, and it's all down hill from there.
    This poem was definitly cool, though I have to say, I've read something a lot like this before. Nice job though,

    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow -- this is actually really cool. I like it. It's well written, it flows nicely... AND *badabing* it's unique!! It made me think about rough sex, lol... I know that's most likely NOT what it's about... but with the biting and clawing of the skin, that's what it brought to my mind.

    -x- Candie
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by teenage_dirtbag | [ Reply to This ]

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