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    dots Submission Name: Courage to move ondots
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    Author: WhErEaMi
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 35/38/24
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCourage to move ondots
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    They had been together for many a year,
    Now, all she could feel was fear.
    She gave all that she could give,
    It just wasn't the way she wanted to live.

    He left without a backward glance ,
    NOt even giving their love a chance.
    She often wonders what she could have done,
    To keep him from going on the run.

    Now she is living all alone,
    With nothing to call her own.
    She can barely make herself eat,
    Wondering if her life will ever again be complete.

    This woman is now moving along,
    Building her courage, and becoming strong.
    Time will heel her broken pride,
    Toward the sunset her heart will glide




    Submitted on 2006-05-16 08:00:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is cool, like someone weak becoming stronger.

    Why was she scared though, did the boyfriend abuse her? It's kind of unclear in that part.

    I like the last stanza, it's nice and gives a nice idea/image.

    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]


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