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    dots Submission Name: Inequality for the unequal part twodots
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    Author: hey.you
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 85/57/19
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Rant/Angry
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    Description:
       this really isn't a poem, it's another rant about the way of the world and why everyone hates me.
    Parts are for peple who really don't want to read any more- part one is the prose- part two is the rant/analysis
    you don't have to comment- just read


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    dotsInequality for the unequal part twodots
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    But he doesn't need happiness.
    he doesn't see

    the most blind are those who refuse to see
    the most excluded are those that refuse to reach out.
    the most lonely are those who make others lonely
    the most angry only make others angry at them
    the most ignorant- why do thi ignorant Always have an opinion on the things they are most ignorant about.

    we reach out to the oppressed
    to the needy
    to the homosexual
    to the muslim/hindu/
    to the strange
    to the foreign
    to the criminal
    to the illegal

    BUT WHAT ABOUT COMMON PEOPLE
    I am SICK about how
    the middle class is ignored
    the successful are taken advantage of
    the Christains are bashed, and the Christains bash the Catholics.
    All in the name of reaching out.
    to people who are not any better
    in fact they aren't better
    people can't act worse than they were created
    people were created for one thing
    and if they fail...




    Submitted on 2006-05-16 09:58:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this and part one as well. Didnt really sense a lot of anger in it and I think you wrote them both very well. Why do we feel the need to pity and give preferential treatment to the less fortunate and shun or chastise those who are successful? Very good point you made there. I applaud you for writing these two pieces. You did a good job with them both.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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