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    dots Submission Name: Good-byedots
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    Author: soaring eyes
    ASL Info:    17/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/30/19
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsGood-byedots
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    It's hard to say those sad words good-bye
    because everytime I think about it, it brings tears to my eyes.
    You told me that you loved me and that you would always be here.
    but your not
    So just know that you will always be in my heart so dear.
    The thoughts always run through my heart and my head.
    Just like the blood that ran down from your temple, on to the pillow, flowing to the bed.
    Why did you take your life so young.
    The news from it all pierces so bad that it stug.
    Forever will my love for you stay.
    While I look into the casket where you lay.
    I promise you I will soar one day like a bird and fly
    But I wish I could Have told you those two words good-bye.




    Submitted on 2006-05-16 10:49:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sad, but beautifully written. Who knows, you may meet again one day.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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