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    dots Submission Name: I give you my wordsdots
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    Author: Poor_Poet
    ASL Info:    18/male/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 31/57/18
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsI give you my wordsdots
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    I spent so much of my time
    giving my words to you;
    you took them even though
    they seemed so poorly fashioned,
    as if you forgot they were mine,
    and so did I...

    when I was writing
    I wrote for you;
    as I wrote,
    I wrote for your eyes,
    hoping my words would
    become infinitely lost within
    them as I have...

    when I speak,
    I speak for your ears;
    with such an intimidating
    audience,
    it is no wonder
    when you are around
    I never talk...

    I have been writing,
    and speaking,
    even thinking,
    like this for so long
    it seems
    my words become
    yours before the letters
    fall on paper,
    and before my lips
    separate
    and my tongue
    begins to move,
    my words are
    yours...

    after all this time,
    all that I found out
    is people dont care
    for your voice;
    they just keep asking
    for me to speak,
    and when I finally do
    I write all this for you.




    Submitted on 2006-05-16 11:39:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a really well done, you started it off well and then at the end you tied it together perfectly.
    I have no suggestions on how to make it better, I think that you did a good job with the wording, form and the overall emotion of the piece.

    I am sorry I do not have more for you,
    take care
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yo, this is a baggin ass poem. You got your point across perfectly in my mind or atleast the point that I made up in my mind that you were trying to get across. You are the first male that I've ever really like on this cite. You're almost as good as me :-).

    Keep on writting, I'll be lookin for more comp.
    Ghost
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by Ghost Child | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this a spoken word piece because the way u broke the lines down makes it seems like it should be. Anyway I like this one a lot and it reminds me of something I tried to write but didn't work. Anyways good piece and this is definately a FAV.
    | Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by Chi-Town Rose | [ Reply to This ]


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