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    dots Submission Name: cheateddots
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    Author: easily_ammused
    ASL Info:    20/f/cottage grove
    Elite Ratio:    0.85 - 84/45/27
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 168
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 411



    Description:
       someone very special


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    dotscheateddots
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    You hear the words spoke from me
    but then they came back at thee
    I lied
    I cheated
    and I laughed
    I cried when you found out
    You yelled
    you screamed
    you stole my sole
    You left me that same day and yet I still.....
    I tried to have you to take me back
    but in the end I would leave
    If my one true love "YOU" cheated me.




    Submitted on 2006-05-16 13:48:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this. The realization in it made this piece very mature, which made me like it a lot. You are getting better at this, the flow works better in this piece, even if it is a tiny bit halting in some places.


    Nice job,
    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-05-24 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      its good. I like it. I think that if you work on it it could be better though.

    ~sweetme
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]
      We are all cheated at least once in this life. We are all left to be nothing at some point. Live on and tell the world to fingerbag itself.
    Loveage,
    Mike
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]



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