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    dots Submission Name: The Unknowndots
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    Author: bbcakes1115
    ASL Info:    22/f/ut
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 35/27/16
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Just a thought Hope you like it.


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    dotsThe Unknowndots
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    Stepping into the vast unknown
    Awakening to the new day

    Upon lifes awaited journey
    I learn to ask new questions

    How do I know what lies before me?
    How do I retain my virtuous soul?

    In the swells of change
    the river that has come to guide me

    I hold tight to the raft of promise
    Look on in the dreaming sea

    Keeping my values sacred
    Taking my life of joy

    The muddy waters sometimes find me
    But my virtue will not let me faulter

    So I sustain the resin of thought
    And continue to challenge the unknown




    Submitted on 2006-05-16 14:06:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very truthful.
    The poem was written with descent amounts of emotion, but I thought a little more could be needed.
    Your message was perfect in how it needed to be conveyed, for that I applaud you.

    In honest reply, Colten
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]


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