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edited your sweet memory

Author: DontLetGo421
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thank you dismentld.i love you dearly.

edited your sweet memory

Lying beneath the summers wind
Your face comes to me,
Pondering upon the moments' shared
Such sweet memories'

Rain clouds forbid the sun to shine
Recalling this tainted past
Your words, your lies, the tears I cried
The good times never last

Condensed sapphire droplets fall on my cheek
A feeling too prevailing…;
We faught, we swore, I felt worth no more,
I just kept on failing

Red, oranges of the newly formed rainbow
Suggesting in the end we’ll be fine
You taught me a lesson and taught it well
That no boy, merit’s this time

Submitted on 2006-05-16 20:44:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow i love it.
i cant believe it though. how come everyone who hasnt experienced it, can write like hell about it?
so yes i agree, it makes me feel like youve experienced this before... but i know better.
love you
| Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by cbgurl413 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah, love. Ok, so I wouldn't know a thing about it. ;) A good poem, wonderfully written, flows well. Loved reading....reminds me of the summer flings....I've said too much.

| Posted on 2006-05-20 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]
  this made me feel like you have experienced this before, love sucks, but it gives great fuel to write on. keep feeding the fire and write more like this and you will do great. there are a few issues with the grammar though.
| Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by manymoodsofme | [ Reply to This ]

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