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    dots Submission Name: edited your sweet memorydots

    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       thank you dismentld.i love you dearly.

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    dotsedited your sweet memorydots

    Lying beneath the summers wind
    Your face comes to me,
    Pondering upon the moments' shared
    Such sweet memories'

    Rain clouds forbid the sun to shine
    Recalling this tainted past
    Your words, your lies, the tears I cried
    The good times never last

    Condensed sapphire droplets fall on my cheek
    A feeling too prevailing…;
    We faught, we swore, I felt worth no more,
    I just kept on failing

    Red, oranges of the newly formed rainbow
    Suggesting in the end we’ll be fine
    You taught me a lesson and taught it well
    That no boy, merit’s this time

    Submitted on 2006-05-16 20:44:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i love it.
    i cant believe it though. how come everyone who hasnt experienced it, can write like hell about it?
    so yes i agree, it makes me feel like youve experienced this before... but i know better.
    love you
    | Posted on 2007-03-16 00:00:00 | by cbgurl413 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, love. Ok, so I wouldn't know a thing about it. ;) A good poem, wonderfully written, flows well. Loved reading....reminds me of the summer flings....I've said too much.

    | Posted on 2006-05-20 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]
      this made me feel like you have experienced this before, love sucks, but it gives great fuel to write on. keep feeding the fire and write more like this and you will do great. there are a few issues with the grammar though.
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by manymoodsofme | [ Reply to This ]

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