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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots
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    Author: frenchie_inlove
    ASL Info:    13, f
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 6/12/8
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 152
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 972



    Description:
       about me, my best friend, and this guy i met. A long story made short, i was in love with him, i believe he liked me, i introduced my friend. She started flirting fell in love, soon enough, he fell in love with her, and i was left standing in the street, with no one around.


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    A best friend lost in the midth of a relation
    an introduction was all that did it
    from one to another
    a flirt here and there and once again,
    leading to darkness
    the tears trikling down the beautiful face
    the ripped heart, black blood dripping
    the click of a camera
    he squeeze of a hug
    one side stolen, the other given
    one boy, two girls, just having fun
    riding the bird through all shadows
    together yet broken, and no resolution
    A best friend lost in the midth of a relation
    Hatred in the mix, forgivness, confusion, and more hatred
    falling in love that is gone
    gone from yourself, gone almots forever
    the love so strong, its almost none
    the spark of a light make you wish even more
    I still love him, yet he has been taken,
    worse, from a friend
    from the grips of my hands
    A best friend lost in the midth of a relation




    Submitted on 2006-05-16 22:30:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The one problem that I had with this piece was that I had a hard time keeping individual thoughts seperate. I couln't understand everything because it all ran together in a single mass. However, the content and emotions were pretty good. Descent amounts of empathy.

    In honest reply, Colten
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]



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