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    dots Submission Name: Down The Warddots
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    Author: GhiHaD
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 46/64/24
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsDown The Warddots
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    Devious
    In sanctum she glides
    Twisting through the corridors
    The pitter patter of blood echoes on her mind
    Quaint little girl
    Dance with me here in this place
    Tampered with between the sheets
    She forgets what she does not need
    Memories lost
    Dance with me once more




    Submitted on 2006-05-17 07:27:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem is beautiful. perfect. i just wish there was more to it but i think that is the best sighn of a great poem....when the readers want more..... very good read...

    AL
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't understand this poem at all. I did like it though, the words were beautifullly written.

    I like this line a lot

    "The pitter patter of blood echoes on her mind"

    It was cool

    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]


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