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    dots Submission Name: You've Got A Waydots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsYou've Got A Waydots

    You've got a way of making me smile
    When there are tears in my eyes.
    And you've got a way of bringing out the truth
    When I want to tell you the lies.
    You've got a way of making me laugh
    When I really should be frowning.
    And you somehow manage to be the ocean
    In which my soul is drowning.
    You've got a way of touching my heart
    When I thought I had put it away.
    And you've got a way of knowing exactly
    What it is I need you to say.
    You've got a way of looking into my eyes
    And seeing the person within.
    And you've somehow managed to be
    Everything from my lover to my friend.
    You've got a way of seeing through my defenses
    And knowing what the hurt is about.
    And you've got a way of loving me
    That I just can't live without.

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      I love this. The piece is beautiful because you manage to capture that feeling of being in love and competely in over your head. I think its wonderful, and not a typical "love poem" which makes it so much better.
    | Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by jsand25 | [ Reply to This ]
      And you somehow manage to be the ocean
    In which my soul is drowning.

    I love this line. I think it makes the poem itself, "poetic"

    The was pretty, and I love them when they are pretty. The ending was very powerful, very conclusive. Lovely.
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Beautiful
    This write is written perfectly
    I wouldnt change a thing
    I can feel the Love you share for your fellow man and I must say in a World that is so Cold
    It is very refreshing to See
    Great Job With this One
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm... I don't think 'he's got a way' to get through to you. I think that your love for him makes you lower your defences to become accessible. I think his way is in fact your way.

    This is a nice description of love... of true love.
    Good work,
    Sad Lion
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by Sad Lion | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes...this is beautiful. I love it. I would say that this is about Tony but I have to ask....is it about the "old" Tony or the "new" Tony. Or maybe just Tony in general. But I don't see how he still gives you love that you need. I just see him outputting problem after problem. Remember how we were talking about how we'd rather have certain people in our lives that cause a lot of pain and a little happiness than not have them in our lives at all? Does this coexist with that? I'm thinking it does.
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmm...beautiful. What a simple yet elegant way you put the feelings of good love together. I like the song you were inspired by too. And how you expressed that true love is greatly inspiring through your descriptions was great.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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