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    dots Submission Name: Go Analog Baby.dots
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    Author: JetPilot
    ASL Info:    18/m/ont
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 46/30/15
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1091
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    dotsGo Analog Baby.dots
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    We’ve all lined ourselves up in perfect order,
    with our backs against the wall,
    and hands at our throats.
    We’re trying to make an example of them,
    by falling out in order,
    and landing on our faces gracefully.
    But sometimes it’s hard to look tough
    on the way down.
    So now we’ve grabbed a handful of dirt,
    pushed it farther into the ground,
    And we hope we’ll come out of this clean,
    because we all know it’s hard enough
    to wash off previous stains.
    Let’s hope they all see us,
    chanting and cheering each other on,
    Maybe they will stop and take notice,
    they’ll say “If only.”
    By the only thing is, it’s a game.
    One we have been playing since we were knee high,
    one we will continue to play until
    someone tells us to stop.
    And when that day comes,
    we’ll shake hands like true gentlemen,
    and be on our way.




    Submitted on 2006-05-17 12:01:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In this write I am Immediately drawn into a war
    Where we are supposed to be bitter enemies but yet I as A Human with emotions realize my so called Enemy is just like me
    War is a sad state where we as soldiers are taught to Kill at all costs
    This is truly sad
    My Only wish is the World would open up and realize the Answer to World Peace is right in Front of Us
    It Is
    Love Sweet Love
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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