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    dots Submission Name: She wants back into her Fairytaledots
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    Author: bambi144
    ASL Info:    17/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 132/109/31
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1062
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1742



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       it was something a bit out of the ordinary, or so i thought


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    dotsShe wants back into her Fairytaledots
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    Her life's a pretty fairytale
    Where nothing ever seems to fail
    But if I were to take it away
    She'd never have our boys to play.
    From Cinderella
    To Riding Hood
    Now, she's in my little wood
    Scared and confused
    She tried to hide
    And now I wait for tears to subside
    She tried to use
    Her little games
    But got herself caught
    Inside my flames.
    She can click her heels All she wants
    But could stay here for
    A matter of months
    Grab your Godmother
    And wish yourself away
    But I've got my own wand
    It's my noose
    And it's at bay
    I'm your new
    Big Bad Wolf
    Bite?
    Bark?
    I've got both.
    And there she goes
    And runs down a trail
    She wants back in her fairytale
    Where nothing ever seems to fail
    Too bad it's too late
    Her skin's white and pale
    She wants back in her fairytale
    Why don't you go tell the Bears?
    Cause no one I know
    Seems to care
    You used to rule everything
    Not anymore
    Now I'm the evil queen
    So come on, Doggie
    I've got your treat
    My noose
    Your neck
    Get on your feet
    Now pull the rope
    Harder and harder
    Poor little princess
    Now, I'm your warder.
    Hurry now
    Off with her head
    Shush Princess
    I think it's almost over
    Your time of dread
    Cold breaths fading
    Soon, no more waiting.
    She wants back in where nothing seems to fail
    Too bad it's darkness in my fairytale.




    Submitted on 2006-05-17 16:04:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good! I love fairytales and I love how you used many different ones in here. I also like how you set yourself up as many different villians, very good! I don't think words can describe how much I like this. This is one of those poems that I think just about anyone would love. Keep it up!

    -angel-

    ps: I have a new fav
    | Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very twisty turny little write. but I am really impressed with it. To put so many Fairytales in one...yet give them that dark twist instead of the sweetness.

    I think that maybe you are on the opposite side of the mirror girl! You will find your fairytale again. At times we all lose hope...yet when the dark days consume us...that is us stepping out of the fairytale into the real world.

    Walk back into that mirror and I am sure that you will find the truth of the story.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooh! This is great. I'm sure everyone has felt like doing that to a "perfect person" in their life. I loved how it was written as well. The form was great, and although long, it was easy to read. A few words were off, but that could possibly be because of differences in pronounciation. Still, it's good!
    Cheers,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]


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