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    dots Submission Name: The Dummiesdots

    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       I am afraid of dummies. I hate them with fervent disdain.

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    dotsThe Dummiesdots

    Do I have reason to fear,
    The ventriliquist dummies,
    That stare at me, out of closet,
    With their glossy glowing orbs?

    And those stupid, little grins,
    Always happy! Always chipper!

    Damn those dummies!

    They laugh at my agony,
    They laugh at my pain,
    Because their sadist,
    In thier stupid fake tuxedos,
    And cumbersome smiles,

    That are always aimed at Me!

    It is always me, they hate,
    Making fun of me in my face,
    And behind my back.

    ...That's why I burned them all.

    For once, I was the one laughing,
    And smiling,
    And snickering,

    With my glossy glowing orbs,
    I watched them all burn,

    To ashes.


    Peace finally came over me,
    Like a veil of comfort,

    For a whole week I dreamed,
    Rather than nightmares,

    For a whole week I slept,

    Until yesterday.

    I had awoken to the smell of charcoal,
    Lingering in my,

    I went to investigate,
    Only to find my insane smiling dummies,
    At me,
    From inside my closet.

    Those smiles, so stupid!
    Radiating mockery at me,
    From the chared ashed bodies,
    Of the dummies!

    And the eyes,...
    The eyes...
    They stare,
    Glaring into me, full of hate, and laughter,

    Damn those dummies!

    Stop smiling,...STOP SMILING!!!!

    I just want them to stop,

    Please, stop smiling!

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      Colten, it's just not the same without you to read it to me. But I still love it. Did you change the middle where you find the burnt dummies in the closet? For some reason I remember it being more drawn out, which was more effective. Still great though. ~jennah
    | Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]
      for the way it was structured, which was a freestyle structure, the end was perhaps a little bit of a let down. there was always a hint of energy under the words but at the end it all seemed to just explode.

    i have to admitt, i dont like dummies. i wouldnt go as far as burning them. all those horro movies ive watched, id be too afraid to. certain they will kill me in my sleep. though i guess you got a bit of that in there huh?

    an interesting piece.
    dont be too disheartened by my critisism. i do the same thing.
    its always easier to judge than accept judgment.
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      were you invaded by dummies or is this a metaphor for all the stupid people that are breeding? which in that case, I couldn't agree with you more. I haven't seen a dummy since Candace Bergen's dad did his act on TV years ago. but I'm sure there are still lots of ventriloquists somewhere. anyway, this is interesting. a little unrealistic, but interesting.
    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]

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