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    dots Submission Name: Always On My Minddots
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    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAlways On My Minddots
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    I'll always remember,
    That spark in your eye,
    I'll always remember,
    Your bright,beautiful smile.

    I'll always think about,
    The times that we shared,
    And the way that you ran to me,
    When you were scared.

    We are so much alike,
    And very different too,
    But we get along,
    We are friends through and through.

    I wanted you so much,
    But you were with another guy,
    Though for one brief moment,
    You were mine.

    I'll always remember,
    Our very first kiss,
    And the way that the sun,
    Graced your sweet lips.

    Although you're not here,
    You're never far behind,
    Because no matter where I go,
    You're always on my mind.




    Submitted on 2006-05-18 01:18:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh...This was so amazingly sweet and cute. I love the simple easy way that it was writen. But even though it wasn't complicated or long. The poem has a depth and emotion that just fills me with feelings when I read it. I ohpe that you enjoy this poem and I hope that this person will always stay in your heart and give you insperation to write. I know I have a few people like that. Just remember that love when it is true will always find its way back to you. Beautiful poem keep it up. And if you are in a bind just think of that first kiss and it will hopefully put a smile on your face.
    Toodles
    Katie
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]


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