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    dots Submission Name: Flower or me?dots

    Author: wasif
    ASL Info:    18/m/Delhi
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 47/42/16
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFlower or me?dots

    This evening, I looked out of the window
    I saw the river water flow
    From my beautiful gazebo
    The sky looked dark and sullen
    The ground looked parched and dry
    The sun was setting in the East
    Whose last rays gleamed upon,
    A flower- so sweet!
    Its colour impressioned the sun’s glory
    Its sullen look told me a story…
    “I blossomed on a day so bright
    My colour mingled in the morning light
    Fresh as the first ripple of ocean, I felt
    Sweet as my nectar I bloomed
    Giggling the way, the bird chirped by
    Singing the song in a humming tune
    But cursed the day, a beastly hand
    Wriggled my neck to and fro…
    I winced in pain… agony… and sorrow…
    But my fate was such…
    I had to die.”
    At this juncture
    Where the day becomes dark and small
    Where sky is no longer blue, but suddle
    Where misery is in hand with life
    Where life is a burden, but not life
    I feel Am I dead or alive?

    Submitted on 2006-05-18 02:40:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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