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    dots Submission Name: Lost In an Imagedots
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    Author: Sun Spots
    ASL Info:    99/ sex yes please/ HeLL
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 36/70/36
    Words: 332
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLost In an Imagedots
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    Seems everything you do isnít enough
    Look at yourself and find yourself lost in your own image
    Sadness covers your eyes, and pain covers your heart
    The emptiness in your eyes and heart are such
    That by gazing unto them I get lost & scared
    But the beauty of your soul
    Is seen by only a sparkle in your eyes
    If only they can realize thereís so much
    Beauty where your true self underlies
    And now you put it all behind

    Your smile seems crooked and plain
    No more does laughter encompass your face
    No more do you welcome faithís great embrace
    No more do you overlook otherís mistakes and imperfections
    I can understand why, never did they overlook yours
    But the worldís not a flat screen you don't have to fit in
    You stand above them, you illuminate them all
    That is what you fail to see

    Faith, love, and truthfulness Seems to be an illusion
    So you neglect all three, you look at your reflection
    Near a pond, then try to find the woods
    But canít find it while your hiding behind a tree

    When you look at your reflection
    Is that all you wanted to see?
    Or was there more you intended to see?
    Has your dream pass you by ?
    Are you where you wanna be ?


    Thereís more to you and me
    You donít seem to be where you belong
    Along side me you canít go wrong
    Come sit by my side
    Will watch are dreams drawn in the midnight sky
    Stars seem to shine at your instant look at them
    From the distance, I only want the world to realize
    What Iíve always known how beautiful is ur soul
    And how you shift a little of the world with your smile
    And presence
    Be who you are, be who you were meant to be
    Because I love you






    Gerri




    Submitted on 2006-05-18 08:27:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is absolutely beautiful
    There is so much Love and understanding in every word of this write
    I can really see how beautifukl your heart and soul is
    I too believe this person is falling victim to what society believes she is and has almost given up any hope for being herself
    I hope and Pray you continue to stay with her even if only as a Friend as she needs to know someone does care and understand
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron

    By the way I am a 1987 Graduate of Rahway High In Rahway NJ May I ask what part of NJ you are from?
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good. I like your declaration... it has a lot of arguments...
    I'd like to point out a couple of mistakes:
    first the title: "Lost In a Image" --> Lost in an image
    and the second one: "If only they can realize thereís such much" --> If only they can realize thereís so much

    Sad Lion
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by Sad Lion | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your simple style. It's really good- the topic of love is so mushy, but you've done a good job of keeping it real. Of keeping it as real life. I don't really understand the middle with the questions. The flow feels interrupted by the questions.
    Vas
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by hey.you | [ Reply to This ]


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