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    dots Submission Name: Without a hello, there can never be a goodbye.dots
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    Author: brokensmile
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 241/326/148
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dots Without a hello, there can never be a goodbye.dots
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    Diverted Conversations Aren't Love
    Untill endless time
    Untill the sun kisses my roof
    With lips of the brightest rays
    None of it is as truthful as that meeting
    All of it is deviod of the reasons why
    We look for compassion in the shadows
    We look for reassurance in shallow goodbyes


    I will never be in love with you
    You will always be in love with me
    At times its swapped
    During long hours where our minds
    slip of the surface of our hearts
    Its switched

    I will hate what you lack
    You will hate all the rest
    But in the long hours of the night
    we will keep eachother's restlessness company
    And cure our fingers of the whispers that have been put to rest.

    But as each of us falls through
    at the end of salty pharagraphs
    that sweat out the words that we missed
    Then you will say goodnight one last time
    and ill foolishly await a parting kiss.




    Submitted on 2006-05-18 10:15:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whoops I forgot to say what my favourite line was.
    "During long hours where our minds
    slip of the surface of our hearts"

    genius.

    JetPilot
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by JetPilot | [ Reply to This ]
      yah... wow... what else can I say? this is sooo good. I am blown away right now. This reminds me of Death Cab or something along those lines. It has such a powerful feel to it. I can't believe this piece. Thanks so much!

    JetPilot
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by JetPilot | [ Reply to This ]


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