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    dots Submission Name: We Walk Out of Wallsdots
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    Author: vintagepepper
    ASL Info:    21/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    7.05 - 191/153/46
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 875
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    Description:
       this poem is about...well...you tell me. i want to know what you think this poem is about.

    and just to clear this up, when i'm referring to "Maggie" ...i'm not talking about an actual person...i'm talking about Maggie Simpson from The Simpsons. :-) enjoy. let me know what you think


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    dotsWe Walk Out of Wallsdots
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    Through the corridors of thought provoking what-have-yous,
    there is nothing significant to sink our minds' teeth into.
    But who should care? What’s it to you?
    Nothing. . .
    Exactly.
    Go through these mazes of concrete and plastic,
    the big boys’ playgrounds,
    holding tight to your narcissistic perceptions.
    Trust me, they will lead you through,
    and you will be at the top.
    But it’s lonely there.
    But I wouldn’t know, so go ahead,
    try it for yourself.
    And you let me know how that goes.
    Pull an Ayan Rhand on the world.
    Or go ahead, be a Maggie,
    I dare you!
    Ignorance isn’t bliss.
    Envelope yourself in a man-made fantasy.
    “Man is the measure of all things,”
    Not in this society, we’ve reduced ourselves to nothing
    with an image of something. . .
    big.
    We’ve wasted away to a tiny voice from a receiver,
    to a few words on a computer.
    We walk out of walls
    and don’t live for ourselves anymore.




    Submitted on 2006-05-18 12:23:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Think this is about how trying to be the Big Cheese isn't really for one's self ... it's an ambition that grows in a weak mind which doesn't know the way to itself, and it's a response to myths and advertisements!
    | Posted on 2007-06-08 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it starting out. I don't know why but I felt you were talking about H.S, or school in general. That's what I got out of it, and I see my view was different than the other commentaries. Which to me is a big plus, different people taking different things from the same work. So Great job there.
    I just didn't like the tempo change in the "middle".
    | Posted on 2006-05-20 00:00:00 | by Elite__s | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, Liked the flow of this ... but I am not sure if I got the point ... not sure either who "Ayan Rhand" is ..know who Maggie is ... so I am going out on a limb ... is this about the fakeness and inhumaness of the world today ... you speak about "a man-made fantasy" and "an image of something. . .
    big. "

    "We’ve wasted away to a tiny voice from a receiver,
    to a few words on a computer.
    We walk out of walls
    and don’t live for ourselves anymore."

    these lines got me thinking of the actuall times you see and speak to people vs. the times you speak on phone/computer/ or even see on TV.

    so is the walking out of walls.... the fact that people seem to "walk" out of walls when watching tv set? .... or am I way off on this?

    other than not being real clear of the body of your writing , it was well written I thought and had nice rhythm to it.

    ~Fey~




    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by Fey | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really good piece. I like the brokenness of the lines. There is something about it that really lures you in. I like that 'big' is on a seperate line, though I am not sure if that is intentional. I have no idea who Ayan Rhand is, though... But that could just be me. It is a bit confusing where you talk about walking out of walls, though I like the concept.

    Good job! Never loose faith in what we are given, and never hide your talent away.
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by saramaple | [ Reply to This ]


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