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    dots Submission Name: Yearning, craving, wantingdots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       short lil history: had an on going thing with a guy whom i only found out (accidently) has a girl back home and she is pregnant with his baby.... To me that is serious and i backed out as soon as i found out

    But now........

    ..............All my suppressed feelings for him are rushing back since his called........


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    dotsYearning, craving, wantingdots
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    Yearning, craving, wanting
    Wanting, craving, yearning
    The man who caressed emotions in my subconscious
    Subconsciously lacing my mind with thoughts
    Thoughts about us being more
    More than friends, greater than lovers
    Lovers tunes ringing in my head as he feasted
    Feasted around, on and in the centre of me
    Me just laying back thinking were we going
    Going, going, going gone
    Gone you were after it all
    All the time, attention and affection
    Affection that I was not getting alone
    Alone she waits for you to come home
    Home to your unborn baby
    Baby daddy, baby daddy, did u forget to inform me
    Me, with whom you promised a future
    Future looked good when you made me believe
    Believing you I was pretty naïve
    Naïve you thought I'd never find out
    Out your secret came when karma rushed through the door
    Doors in me slammed shut
    Shut your mouth, shut your lies, I shut you out
    Out, out, out ….till
    Till you call
    Call to say "ITS YOU I MISS"
    Miss me, pass me with all your bullshit
    Shit, I shut you out but kept the memories
    Memories of the beach, the late nights, the suppers, the secrets
    Secrets of your past you shared
    Shared it all till I cried for you inside
    Inside me rages a battle
    Battling with this yearning, craving, wanting
    Wanting you just one more occasion
    Occasionally wishing there was no her
    Her swollen belly with your desired baby
    Baby…. I don't say this to you
    You have her, so I can't say this
    This is eating away at me, causing holes of desire and yearning
    Yearning, craving, wanting
    Wanting to utter “I miss you too”




    Submitted on 2006-05-18 12:49:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aouch! Talking about bad situations, you got it really messed up, but trust me you’ll get over it; you have a pretty good poem here, it’s honest. “Yearning, craving, wanting” those are powerful verbs, I like the way you used them in the first two lines, the repetition and all …
    great work
    ~~drakoniss~~
    | Posted on 2006-05-20 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, I know this feeling. Consuming, unforgettable, unending and painful...not to mention confusing because you cannot control your own mind to put a stop to it...yeah I know it. I liked your poem, related to it in different ways. It is so hard to share this feeling, words most often escape me. I did try though, check out my page and see if you relate to what I have written in "What Do I Do Now?" and "Voyeur of My Soul."
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by Suffer Well | [ Reply to This ]
      My Friend this is one incredibly powerful write
    I believe this man manipulated your mind
    And Trust me You are better off without him
    Use the lessons you learned from this relationship to better yourself with the next
    I urge you not to reconsider your decission As I believe you will only be hurt in the end
    Your Heart is pure you did nothing wrong stop blaming yourself for this relationship being destroyed
    Remember it is his mistakes that have destroyed it not yours
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how you used the 1st word & last word together- that was one of my favorite parts. It showed that there are some writers that show their creative side. But, unfortunately, it's not that difficult to be original/creative when one must hurt from stated situation...I'm sure there's @ least one man for every woman that's put them through hell. For some there's been more... Things will work out as they were meant to be. Take care of yourself.
    :)
    Tonya
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by Tonya V. | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds like a pretty messed up situation going on with you. I can relate to a small degree. Right now you are being tested and you have to stay strong. You basically gave yourself all the reasons you should continue to to shut him out and toss out those memories behind his ass when you finally shut and lock the door to your heart and mind. This was written as if you were penning your thoughts as thye cropped up in your mind. Very creative the way you led each thought, although seperate into each other. I think this was good, but it seem to be more of a vent then a poem to me. I don't know, but it was good. I hope things work out for the best for you.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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