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    dots Submission Name: Nothing Left To Losedots
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    Author: southernswagger
    ASL Info:    23/f/england
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 9/54/45
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    dotsNothing Left To Losedots
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    -It's like a knife in your back,
    pushed hard and twisted.
    -Like when you looked in the mirror
    and wished you never existed.
    -And those times you drank to forget it all,
    but the morning after just depressed you more.
    -A kick in the teeth, and the chest aswell.
    -Like being told you're in heaven but you know its hell.
    -When rusty razorblades start gaining appeal,
    -And you can't tell a bad dream from what is real.
    -You know smoking kills but you don't seem to care, and you take comfort from the stench in your clothes and your hair.
    -Being told you are wrong when you know you are right, but you're too apathetic to put up a fight.
    -When you hit rock bottom and realise you're only half way down,
    -And they say the ocean's theraputic but you just want to drown.
    -And if the sky caved in you'd probably just smile,
    and be thankful it would all be over in a while.




    Submitted on 2006-05-18 18:31:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wont critique this poem because...its just not the kind of poem that you can critique. It seems as though you wrote this in a sort of hopless rage. Feels as though you are self-destructing. As lame as this sounds i'm just sad that i can't hug you or something if you really feel that way, because ive felt that way and it sucks.
    | Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]
      Holyy crappp this is probably one of the coolest poems I have ever read, I am so dispaointed I am the only person to have looked at it yet, cause this is just unreal!

    "Being told you are wrong when you know you are right, but you're too apathetic to put up a fight."

    I love that line so much man! like you have no idea... this is really good piece, I hope you keep up this stuff. Like I rarely like poems that ryhme, but... you took the crown for sure, you stole my breath, and my attention, good job... amazing.

    JetPilot.
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by JetPilot | [ Reply to This ]


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