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    dots Submission Name: The Now...dots
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    Author: JetPilot
    ASL Info:    18/m/ont
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 46/30/15
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 106
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 857



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    dotsThe Now...dots
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    My head doesn't seem to be attached.
    And all the lies and unspoken words
    are now seeping out my opened vocal chords.
    What the hell can I do to stop this mess.
    It seems now more then ever,
    Karma is the cold blooded killer that has
    brought my life down hill so fast that I hit
    bottom before I knew I took off.
    Now... I am sitting facing nothing,
    the reality of it is I'm alone, helpless
    and tired of fucking around. I feel
    so empty, and used, like nothing
    I have had within the last few months
    was real.
    So show me reality...
    show me the difference
    between last nights paradise,
    and the nightmare I'm in now.
    Show me something i haven't seen before.
    Open up my eyes, because I am going blind.




    Submitted on 2006-05-18 20:54:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I loved and hated this poem. I loved it because you were incredibly honest with what you felt. You put everything out there..almost violently,which made it "beautiful." At the same time i hated it because this poem portrays exactly how i feel right now. Sorry if that dosen't make any sense to you.
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]
      Very paradoxical, and a lot more is i there than at first glance.

    The style was pretty cool, and added to the "going crazy" mood by crashing through the piece without a break.

    Nice stuff, I liked it

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]



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