Description: This is just a poem i wrote out of hate, and depression.
Cinderella's dead -------------------------------------------
Standing out in the middle of the road
waiting for a car to come
My prince charming is a toad
this is why fairytales are dumb
No pumpkins to ride in
no fairy god mothers
just a cinderella spin
just like all the others
I'm here to say I'm not cinderella
or your servant girl
so run outside in the rain with your stupid unbrella
this isn't how my world's going to unfurl.
I love your idea, but agree that the icons should go. I think that the metaphor was totally effective and that the poem had an underlying attitude about it. It is so appropriate to modern life the idea of no longer believing in magical things. wow xx S
OK, first i think you should take out those icons because they really distract the reader and take away from the poem. Also i think its spelled unfurl, not unfurel. Ok enough wit my little complaints. I really like where you're going wit this poem and like the metaphor wit cinderella, it was a nice touch. You did a good job getting your feelings out and showing the reader that life isn't like the fairy tales and ppl almost never live happily ever after. You did good show the reader your thoughts about wats happening, and i'm sorry about that. Hope it gets better. peace
Submission Name: Cinderella's dead
