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    dots Submission Name: The Silver Sundots
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    Author: zhi wei
    ASL Info:    17, Male, Malaysia.
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 171/203/53
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I love the night.


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    dotsThe Silver Sundots
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    The silver sun
    sits amongst the stars tonight;
    a mirror of the daylight’s eye,
    that sends these eyes astray,
    far away,
    from the panes they travel through.

    But they are not thoughts of science;
    for science,
    like the golden drapes of day
    reveal only that which is known,
    and there is little wonder in knowledge.
    Yet so much more
    in the uncertainty of the unfamiliar.

    As I prolong my gaze
    at the sky’s glimmering grey light
    I smile at its perfection;
    its full circle, so continuous;
    a ring which weds me,
    in wonder, to the night.

    For tomorrow,
    I shall breathe
    and know nothing.

    For tonight,
    I shall let that breath be stolen
    even for a second,
    beneath the silver sun
    where life and beauty became one.




    Submitted on 2006-05-19 06:16:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "But they are not thoughts of science;
    for science,
    like the golden drapes of day
    reveal only that which is known,
    and there is little wonder in knowledge.
    Yet so much more
    in the uncertainty of the unfamiliar."

    This is a beautiful line. I like your stance one day and light and the correlation between light and science. As light shines down revealing the msytery of midnight, so does science. Hmmm . . . For me, I've always loved the nights- it is indeed a mystery. Last night, we had our windows open in our bedrooms and I could hear everything, smell the freshness of the green fields. Even though the road crews were out fixing the roads, it didn't interrupt me in listening to the wind blow, the trees and plants sway or the night birds sing. It was enjoyable.

    You have a wonderful talent w/ words, I remember reading other poems by you and I enjoyed it immensely. This was a great one.
    good job.
    -stacey M.-
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by idlewriter | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very lovely piece of work you've written, well done. First of all, like probably others will say, rhyming and all that, well ya know what? Screw it. The way you wrote this there is absolutely no reason to go in and change it to make things rhyme. This is good all its own. Now, I'd like to state the obvious, you're talking about the moon.

    I have my own feelings for the moon, but you just seemed to sum them all up into this wonderful work that you've done. It expresses what I wished to when seeing that lovely figure up in the night sky. So, 1) you have my congrads on this lovely work and 2) you have my thanks for writing it, seeing as though it is a topic we both can share and write upon. Very well done, my friend.

    ~Noreu
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by Noreu Hotishima | [ Reply to This ]


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