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    dots Submission Name: Population Bombdots
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    Author: CleoCollier
    ASL Info:    40/F/South
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 83/84/26
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Who thinks population words are poetic? A charm of hummingbirds, a smack of jellyfish...
    This is about populations of different kinds of men.


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    dotsPopulation Bombdots
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    A smack of bastards
    tight as pie
    gossip and brag,
    wrap in husks crushed
    garlic and
    a choice heart.

    A rabble of studs
    monster blood
    battle water
    melon thieves' wives
    who keep them
    bedeviled.

    A pelt of elders
    slit and gut
    four tornadic
    mandalas...hmmm
    looks like peace
    for breakfast.




    Submitted on 2006-05-19 07:03:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A smack of [censored]s eh? Yes I think population words are poetic. Like a murder of crows. Actually that's the only one I know and I got it from a movie . Honestly I wish this was a little longer so I could learn some more words. 'Crushed garlic and a choice heart.' Sounds like a meat product. Ykno like preparing meat for cooking? I guess thas kinda wot it is eh? Hm. well good write man - I must confess that I didn't quite understand the whole thing, but it left a good feeling.
    shard
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]


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