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    dots Submission Name: A Fellow on a Walkdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsA Fellow on a Walkdots

    And the fellow must die as well
    And take heed that a body is a body, and no soul will absolutely be immortal
    A fellow, like the broken hearted girl must dwindle to dust
    to ashes and soil, the ground you walk on

    How unlucky it is to walk on a grave
    And yet, everyday you step on another brother
    Whether it be a bird, a worm, or my nephew
    or any other creature belonging to the cult that is existense
    their deteriotrating bodies become your stepping stones

    It matters none- How beautiful the fellow
    Nor his pen, his hands, the lovely words he left
    Nor any other body part belonging to this fellow
    His being will be reduced
    to a path in the garden that will inevitably lead to your own

    Submitted on 2006-05-19 12:41:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this "death" makes me sad: cuz it say that no matter what we do in life in the end- - it doesn't even matter[notevenpoetry] -- or it never mattered in the first place .../. which in spawns of spells ../. this is very true .../. but none the less very good write .../.

    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]

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