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    dots Submission Name: Don't Cut your Haredots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       i don't know...there is a moral

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    dotsDon't Cut your Haredots

    she would never know she'd been unkind
    would she come back the way she left, all her dreams died the day she cut her hair
    what lovely hair
    red and white
    and Hare
    and Hare
    and never there
    would there ever be there
    a Hare
    She would never return they say, till the leng was restored by there was a curse
    on her HAre
    and hair
    and hair
    and barely there
    was any hair

    Submitted on 2006-05-19 13:03:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i didnt get it sorry?

    it is really unique from what i got

    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, your red and lovely flower poem made more sense when you explained it to me...

    Maybe this would too.

    she would never know she'd been unkind
    would she come back the way she left, all her dreams died the day she cut her hair

    I really liked this...but I would like to know the connection between it and a rabbit...

    I am terribly confused.
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an interesting poem. I didn't really understand it, but that doesn't mean anything about a poem. I was confused that you used to different spellings of the word hair. And the only definition of hare i know, is a rabbit. So that really confused me.

    I'd like to know the meaning behind this though. It left me wondering.
    | Posted on 2006-05-20 00:00:00 | by Dylan fan | [ Reply to This ]
      this whatof fun-n-games ../. again very tradtional form text an grammmer ../. i love this it brings a smell of joyest spring to my tounge ../. very good write "tab" ../. again i love your work as welll or even better then my own ..././.

    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]

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