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    dots Submission Name: Another slitdots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 974
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        wrote this one today at school and now im in trouble cuz i am late for my next class
    who gives a shit .
    ttul
    stormkrow


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    another slit on my teenage wrist
    people asking why
    i 'll tell you why
    too much pressure
    from you ass holes to be normal
    another slit on my wrist that is two now
    the blood is starting to drip slowly
    at first it'll get faster
    the razor blade runs across my wrist like a figure skater on ice
    another slit on my wrist that is three now
    now i can feel the pain i 'm bleeding a little faster
    that evil razor blade of mine it has me posessed
    another slit on my scar covered wrist that is four now
    this time it is differnt from any other night
    my hand is numb normally that dosen't happen untill slit 96 but now bleeding too fast i can't stop it
    for some reason i don't want to stop it
    another slit on my blood covered wrist
    my last chance to say my good byes
    to the peopl that i love
    but they don't love me
    another slit who gives a shit ???




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      my girlfriends thoughts


    I think that it is quite amazing and nothing but the truth. Kids slit their wrists everyday to try and control something and that something is the pain since the wrold tries to contorl our every move and our very breath maybe even our deaths. If we don't let them control us or shape us make us into what they want us to be they judge us and hurt us even shame us. Keep with the truth and you alone will survive this world this world of control.
    ~Fallen Eternal Dreamer~

    at least my girlfriend has the "balls" to post something after she reads stuff!!!
    sk
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by stormkrow | [ Reply to This ]


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