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    dots Submission Name: Scars From You Don't Lastdots
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    Author: Liv2LoveThePain
    ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527/1515/256
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1255
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 954



    Description:
       No, they don't last, but they always come back again later.


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    dotsScars From You Don't Lastdots
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    Love is lies and lies are life,
    But hey, why lie to me?
    Sleep through the emotional,
    Motionless activity.

    (Grab the star and pull it down.
    Hold it to your lighter.
    Watch the fire meet the flame.
    Put the star back brighter.)

    I didn't take my own advice,
    And turned your voice to glass.
    I hear it and it slits my throat,
    But scars don't always last.

    You know just how to bother me.
    It's such a waste of breath.
    I blame you cause it's still your fault
    That nothing good is left.

    It seems, my door's unlocked for you.
    I hate it, but it's true.
    I have no reason left to care,
    But somehow, I still do.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I absolutely love this.

    Completely. I'm not quite sure what else to say. Extremely relatable, obviously, and the stanza in italics is amazing. I am completely blown away right now. I know that comments aren't only supposed to be compliements, but I can offer nothing else. I'm not too crazy about the title, that's the only thing that I can say that isn't complimentory. Brilliant. A favorite for sure.

    *sandi*
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Dimension_X | [ Reply to This ]
      I was gonna pull a Samm and copy and paste the whole poem in here, put i decided that that wouldn't be very original, so i'm just gonna favoritize it instead and be off.

    but before i go i am going to ask about the stuf in parantheses... is that you or someone else writting?

    BELL
    -Kate
    | Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by MyFairCalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi NikkkI,

    i dont know why ppl thought this was confusing becaue i thought it was one of your more easier self explanitory poems. Well i thought it was wonderful and i cant say musch more because the bells about to ring. ill be seein ya soon.

    love always,
    Samm
    | Posted on 2006-05-24 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty good. Nice rhythm and rhyme and great flow but heck you knew that didn't you.

    Hmmm... I like the message of this and its so true, scars they don't last but they always at somepoint rear their ugly head, like the past often does.

    Keep up the good work
    and take care

    Later
    Jason
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      Hah, you have this reoccuring theme of absolutely hating this person. And they're always inflicting damage on you. Yet, your words always flow well together. You always know exactly what to say and when to say it. I commend you on these attributes.


    I know that this may sound mean, comparing you to a narcotic poet, but you remind me of Sylvia Plath. The way she writes about the fact that men are horrible people. You're always writing about how someone is always putting you down.


    As a side note, ifyour poetry is based on someone in your life. I don't know whether to tell this guy to stop or to bother you more. That may sound sick, but you're a gorgeous girl on the inside, and you don't deserve that. Yet, if it didn't happen, you wouldn't be producing such wonderful poetry.

    Isn't it ironic, how people who live great life styles never produce something amazing, yet, the people who live through horrid things, can produce such beauty?
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by Secrets Unheard | [ Reply to This ]
      Great job Nikkki!
    The last two lines were marvelous!
    I dont have any thing else to critique on it because you did a fine job and the italicized part was a neat touch and probably my favorite part of this one.
    Swell job!
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Nikki, I have nothing to say about this, except, super excellent!

    Very very very very good.

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-05-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem even if it reminds me of the hurt a friend had inflicted upon me. we are still friends and fight and have disagrements. recently i almost lost him as a friend and now will do anything to keep him as a friend. it reminds me of how much i really care for him. i love the last 2 lines especially:
    "I have no reason left to care,
    But somehow, I still do."
    just before we almost parted he made it unbearable to be around with and even away from. he hurt me so badly and yet i still cared and wanted him back. yes i agree with you, scars from my friend don't last but they always seem to come back.

    love suzi

    | Posted on 2006-05-20 00:00:00 | by sushi wok | [ Reply to This ]
      I was a little confused by this, but I did find this to be good nonetheless. I felt your imagery was good, but did not tell me much about this piece. Overall, confusing but nicely written.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was great. I loved the star part. I thought taht was a very cool stanza. I don't know what it's about, but I still get it. You could also use a lighter to light a blunt and then you wouldn't care. That's what I do. I think, if you would just sit back and smoke some weed, you would feel a lot better.
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by dude90998 | [ Reply to This ]
      great poem, it flows really well. And more importantly its thought provoking and makes me want to read it more than once (!)

    I don't know if I 'get it' or not... my interpretation would be that someone has lied, you know they lied, are trying to forgive them of it, whilst remembering it so as not to care so much, and failing at both, as you still love them - which hurts as they know they lied?''' :/

    Was the star bit, your inner strength - rebuilding ?... or am I just forgetting to just read a nice poem, smile and say oh that was a nice poem lol?...

    Oh Im in one of those moods... dum de dum, (twiddles thumbs)

    I enjoyed it

    Debbie

    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by cerberus74 | [ Reply to This ]
      I get this feeling that I get it but then again I don't. It's like an emotion I'm on the verge of grasping. I think the star part is what threw me off, I don't really see how it relates to the rest of the poem, but that's most likely just me. I love your language, description & rhyme though. I actually really love it whether I understand why or not. ^_^

    ~~Stephanie~~
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by literary lover | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem makes me want to light a cigarette and reminisce with someone about the old times.

    I went through a crazy relationship for three years, but I was on the other end of that poem. I think I still am.

    Very touching piece. Interesting rhythm to it.

    Write on!
    ~Orin
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Orin | [ Reply to This ]
      That was so beautiful. If I ever get a boyfriend again, and he breaks up with me, i'm sending this to him. It's awsome! -Mikki
    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by Pirate | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... thanks for the input dude90998... for starters, don't listen to him. On anything... lol. What an idiot.

    I think this piece is a lot like some others you have written, it shared the same feelings you have written about before. I enjoyed the stars stanza too, great job. The tempo of this is so... overdone and really you are much better than that same beat and rhyme and poetry is so much more than that. Break out of the shell you've climbed into and write free.
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]


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