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    dots Submission Name: keeper of the souldots
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    Author: littlenative
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    dotskeeper of the souldots
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    ligering cold amidst the damp morning air swaying soft against a gentle breeze lies despair dark clouds billow hanging low around my heart dense fog thickens below reaching out to an oblivion of dark empty space of something or someone that I can embrace I feel with my fingertips its solid and strong a deep force within me knows something is wrong as i press my body closer im engulfed by a song sharp winds whistle an animals cry In my mind i choose to deny to see whats entrapped me immense evil tree ihad seen once before in the wake of my dreams each branch taking hold of each fear in my soul Istruggle against it to break from its hold when something inside me says to let go the whispers of lost souls cry out in the night come closer my children theres no need to fight




    Submitted on 2006-05-19 18:47:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Needs lots of punctuation to create thoughts rather than a mindless babble. Capitalize your I's. The words themselves were good. The seemed to intensify as it went which helped me to keep reading.

    In honest reply, Colten
    | Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]


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