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Savior


Author: Trifecta
ASL Info:    14.male.Somewhere
Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 32 /34 /28
Words: 289
Class/Type: Lyrics /Passion
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Savior



I AM SAVIOR
I AM SAVIOR
I AM SAVIOR
I AM SAVIOR

I am savior
I want to save you
Let me be your hero
I want to protect you

Help me save the world
And make an impact
In the history books
The history books across the globe
I want to be remembered...

I AM SAVIOR
I AM SAVIOR

I hope you realize, I just saved your life

Fire burns, buildings collapse
I watched as all the things
I've known came crashing to the ground
I wanted to save them all
And send the evil away
Beyond my strength it was
So I could do nothing
Except for rescuing you...

I AM SAVIOR
I AM SAVIOR
I AM SAVIOR
I AM SAVIOR
I AM SAVIOR
I HOPE YOU HEARD ME

I am savior
Whether you want me to be or not
I am your savior
And whether you choose to believe it or not

I JUST SAVED YOUR LIFE

I just rescued you from the ultimate ending

I SAVED YOU!

Fire burns, buildings collapse
I watched as all the things
I've known came crashing to the ground
I wanted to save them all
And send the evil away
Beyond my strength it was
So I could do nothing
Except for rescuing you...

Be grateful, you could've been like everybody else... everyone else we knew.

I chose to save you for a reason.

Fire burns, buildings collapse
I watched as all the things
I've known came crashing to the ground
I wanted to save them all
And send the evil away
Beyond my strength it was
So I could do nothing
Except for rescuing you...




Submitted on 2006-05-20 14:18:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this definatly could have been a bit more clear; I'm all for open interp. but it would help for the reading to know some of what *you* were feeling and then be able to connect their own feelings and experiences/opinions to that. I did like this alot though, I could totally hear this though which is awesome because most of the time (on ES anyway) when i read lyrics I don't imainge a kick ass beat behind them....I could easily see this being somewhere between screamo and metal which is f.ucking awesome. This was so intense, you showed a lot of talent in this one, I'm definatly gonna have to check out some of your other writes. also you had a lot of strong lines but,
"I chose to save you for a reason."
easily the strongest part of this write for me, it'd take too long to explain exactly why that is but I can relate.
peaceness,
~jess
(p.s. u seem really awesome, do u have msn, yahoo or aim??)
| Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm.. this is interesting, it sounds almost lyrical and my mind stuck music to it almost instantly. i think your strongest line is "I am your savior" just because it makes it all so much more personal. perhaps you can add in or elaborate on who exactly this was written for, your intended audience is a little unclear at the moment..
and what did you mean by "Be grateful, you could've been like everybody else... everyone else we knew." if this is a personal poem (which it seems to be) you should tell (at least in your description) what all is going on.
in your poem try to tell more about what you're saving (the audience) from.
its a good write, just elaborate a bit

<3 and peace
| Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by thehappyfaery | [ Reply to This ]


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