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    dots Submission Name: you are the promise breakerdots
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    Author: EEKS
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    you were my one and only lonely friend for so long
    you left me, remember?
    i looked for any reason, any way, and i couldnt have tried harder
    im still trying
    you think that now that someone loves me
    i cant love you just as much as i always have
    love isnt a trade
    pretend not to care, i always will,
    but i cant change this
    ive tried so hard and pushing a wall gets you nowhere
    so i climbed and climbed and ran away from this
    it hurt, couldnt you see that
    you hurt but you blamed yourself
    i blamed invisible enemies so everyone was out to get me
    i tore myself up trying to make this different, nothing changed
    i just couldn't do it

    you can't look past your broken heart to see im not wrong for loving someone else
    you were my one and only and you left me
    i couldn't bring you back
    i had to leave that place that made me so sad
    now im happy and you seem to hate that
    i cry for you though, almost every day
    does that change anything?
    if i wrote you letters everyday, and never talked to anyone else, and cried so much i drowned, would it be ok then?
    would you forget it then?

    you say you hurt but you never saw what i went through
    i had to sit and wonder whose fault it was and how much i should hate you
    i had to sit and stare at the pictures of you not knowing if id ever see you again
    i had to sit and cry for my one and only real friend
    you were the one who said youd never leave and you did
    you have no reason not to trust me
    i kept my promises
    i do still love you
    im not over it, just like i said back then
    its you trying so hard to forget




    Submitted on 2006-05-20 17:22:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      all of this is very similar to what I am going through right now. the only thing I can say to you that may help you (because it helps me a little) is that we go through these terrible times, so that when the good comes we can really appreciate it. Very honest write. good work
    | Posted on 2006-05-20 00:00:00 | by BrokenStream | [ Reply to This ]


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