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    dots Submission Name: No Emotions Leftdots

    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 1012
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       this is a poem obviously on how i feel about my ex and a former friend. I know i come across as a heartless b***h in this poem but it's what i feel and no i not this way normally so please just say what you think. thanks Jo

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    dotsNo Emotions Leftdots

    You started this little game you like to play
    The one where you see if I can still cry
    Well guess what games over now and forever

    You see I no longer feel a thing when it
    Comes to you or my ex you went off with
    I can hear your name and still not feel a thing

    No more tears fall from these eyes where
    Your concerned, see that would mean I
    Care about you and what you think

    Why should I care about you when you
    Donít respect me enough not to play
    These petty little games with me that you play

    You say I have lost your trust but guess what
    I never did a thing to lose the trust from you
    But you lost my trust the minute you left with him

    Some may call me heartless for my lack of
    Feelings toward you, but I have no feelings
    For you not even anger, so if that makes me
    Heartless than that is what I am

    You see there are no emotions left in me
    To give you sympathy which is all you want
    When you brake a nail itís oh poor baby

    Well guess what thatís life get over it
    But donít worry someone somewhere
    Is bound to pity you until they get to know
    You too then guess what there going to leave to

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      wow. you don't really sound like a Bitch though. Although, you Do sound strongly opinionated. You are heartless! ;) j/k....unless you say you're heartless_ LOL!
    Anywho! In your 5th paragraph, last line, I think you meant to put then not "than." Otherwise...good write! keep it up! peace-
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Your sentances dont really flow with the stucture you have picked. I wouldnt brake it up so much. I can relate to what you have written though. Keep writting.
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by Peachpitt | [ Reply to This ]

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