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    dots Submission Name: A Better Worlddots
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    Author: little_theif
    ASL Info:    20/F/Halifax
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 42/58/26
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 127
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 589



    Description:
       One of many poems that have come from me sitting zoning out in political science class


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    dotsA Better Worlddots
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    I believe in a world without fear
    As impossible as it may sound
    A world where all people
    Are free to be as they are
    As they want to be
    I do not yet live in that world
    I wish that I did
    But my world is an oppressive one
    Filled with hives and drones
    Where you think and do as you're told
    Those who deviate are shut out
    Until they can conform
    So I hold this better world
    Always in my mind
    The hope that someday I may find it
    May live there and be free
    Lights the darker days




    Submitted on 2006-05-21 00:51:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The last line didn't seem to fit to me.

    Also, this is very straightforward. To me poetry should have more expression, more elegant and interesting words then the straightforward obvious ones.


    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]



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