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Pride is what makes us demons Pride is mankinds weakness Pride is what seperates us what makes us inhuman Pride is to practice what you preach soulesly Pride is modestys lost non realizable Pride is when you find faults in others and none in yourself Pride is what makes us unworthy of trust Losing yourself in it youve ruined yourself to burn Pride is your heart black and cold Its how a spirit becomes a demon, how Lucifer became satan and the reason why I cannot change Pride is what makes me and her He and I you and them stand togather Pride is what seperates nations Pride is what seperates nations Pride is what seperates nations Pride is you, sick and twisted Pride is you,holy or unholy pride is. I see your pride It is a shame that you do not. |
Im afraid if I added all your poems to my favorites they wouldnt fit. But you should know anyway.| Posted on 2007-06-03 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ] | This was cool and different. I really enjoyed reading it. Different format, good job. Thansk for sharing | Abbas | Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ] | I like the format of this poem. Very unique . . . and cool . . . h a h a h a h a. Anyways. it so awesome that I'm adding it to my favorites. Maybe some grammar changes but im can expectthat from you . . . I guess it makes it sould cooler... maybe? UGHHH... I don't know what to say... I just ... I like it a llloooooottttt! | <Unperfect3 | Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ] | I liked this but i agree the repitition of Pride is a little too common.... you could try | 'Pride is your heart black and cold Its how a spirit becomes a demon, how Lucifer became satan and the reason why I cannot change' or something like this Just a suggestion... Thoroughly enjoyed the read though Thanks | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ] | I like this. very full of meaning, and a slight twist of personal infabrication for a certain adherence. however, pride is used too much, try synonyms. like arrogance or something, but you got somehting here, nicely done. oh, and that 4th. line could use some revision, it seems forced. | | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ] | i liked the write. it was different. you slander pride in way to make it seem like the sin it really is. if people read this they will no longer see pride as just a simple thing they will see it as so much more. | -brandon | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Leon Kennedy | [ Reply to This ] | I know what you mean... | this goes in my faves | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ] | I love this poem. . . . . . I can't stop reading it for some wierd reason~ | ~ g fREAK ~ >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ] | |