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    dots Submission Name: The Voicesdots
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    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Does anyone else hear constant ringing in their ears? It annoys the heck out of me.


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    dotsThe Voicesdots
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    In the back of my mind,
    Where all seems quite fine,
    The voices multiply, and lust.

    Some, sit and mock,
    The rest chirp like a flock,
    All the while, I'm ground into dust.




    Submitted on 2006-05-21 21:09:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love how this has the flow of a nursey rhyme! I can hear it in my head, little kids singing this and prancing around...anyway I thought it was great!! The hypocrisy of it soundsing like a nursey rhyme and dealing with this topic just makes it all the better!!
    | Posted on 2007-08-28 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      "The leprachaun tells me to burn things!" heh..sorry, I'm in a good mood right now. you are good at the short poem writings. Granted, I would like to see more...but only because it is on a topic that I enjoy to talk about. Your imagery is real good in this one too, especially for it being such a short poem. Have you ever tried Haikus?

    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what you mean, hun. You should try thinking about something else, and usually that just makes it go away. But I don't think it necessarily goes with the idea of a ringing in your ears. Just me though... Still, good job! ^_^
    Cheers,
    ~Sephe~
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting colten. I'll have to read more of your stuff b4 I can comment fully on anything.
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      I saw a show on unsoved mysteries where some people hear a constant ringing but it's unexplained. Not that that helps you any.
    | Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by Elite__s | [ Reply to This ]


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