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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1026
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 541



    Description:
       Just some writing,,, just some flowing... getting bac in the rythem....

    My studio make me write to musk so i said fuck it


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    I got this beat in my head, im trying to bleed it out
    Trying to figure out,
    if I should go easy for the knock out
    E'erbody got grillz and 24's
    shit thats fema checks payment
    For the shit NO went through
    But we fixing to make a statement


    Ghetto ballars working in Burger king
    Got rappers dressed in Lep suits
    claiming to be a king
    Let that stupid motherfucker wanna hit back
    they gonna come back to get him and cornrows and a chin strap




    Submitted on 2006-05-22 02:01:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yeah i wasn't really feeling this one. u really didn't say much other than the shout out to N.O.
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      good sound but it sounds like you were just rambling trying to jumpstart something it would have better writting in notebook then thought on it

    and then delive the final statement
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by daniel05 | [ Reply to This ]


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